2018免费修改留学申请文书活动_第二、三周幸运儿公布

 

第二、三周中奖幸运儿的修改完稿已经列出于最下方,请大家参考!

想参加免费润色留学文书的朋友们,请参考活动办法。

参加办法:
  1. 找到【霍华斯Wordvice微博主页】。
  2. 在此活动置顶博文下方并『评论』下面完整一行字:我要WORDVICE免费修改留学文书,并将需要润色的文书发送至admissions@wordvice.com。
  3. 以上步骤都完成后,就敬请期待幸运降临,抽中的小伙伴我们会单独私信联系哦。

 

第二,三周的幸运儿对我们润色服务的专业性也是非常认可,并为我们留下了使用心得!

第二周幸运儿使用心得:

十分感谢这次Wordvice举办的活动。虽然已经在美国居住了数年,但在英文的使用上,

还是常常出现许多很中式英文的用法,而wordvice的编辑人员都很细心的帮我挑出来了。

修改之后的文章在阅读上变得更通顺,但是丝毫没有改变我所想表达的意思。

真的非常推荐Wordvice的文章润色服务!

由编辑Max, V.修改

编辑Comment:

This draft of your SOP is well organized and effectively explains your background, interests, motivations, and aspirations. I have flagged areas that would benefit from additional attention and made extensive sentence-level edits to eliminate grammatical/usage issues and clarify/refine delivery.

 

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第三周被选中的幸运儿是准备申请美国的博士学位,我们编辑者Gail L.非常细心的替得奖者修改SOP, 不仅仅是修改句型和文法上的错误,连文章的结构都做了调整!

由编辑Gail, L.修改

编辑Comment:

Thank you for using wordvice! I edited your statement of purpose carefully to eliminate errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. To improve flow and ease of reading, I also added transitions between sentences, ideas, and paragraphs. I refined the overall struture of the essay by adjusting the paragraph order to ensure a logical structure and augmenting the final paragraph to provide a stronger and more cohesive conclusion. I also wrote several comments throughout the document, and I would recommend that you review my comments carefully before deleting or accepting them.

In general, the purpose of the statement of purpose for graduate school admissions is to state your motivation for graduate study, describe your academic/professional qualifications, and outline your career goals. Most of your essay is devoted todescribing your previous research experience, which gives the reader a very thorough overview of your accomplishments. I would encourage you to consider writing a little more specifically about your motivation for pursuing a PhD degree or about your career goals (and how earning a PhD will help you achieve those goals). For example, you might explain in greater detail what you mean by “my goal [is] to advance future wireless and multimedia technology.” Do you want to continue working on high throughput wireless network systems? After graduation, where do you plan to work (In what field? In what kind of company? What position do you want?)? How will earning a PhD enable you to be more successful in your career? You do not need to answer all these questions; rather, I would suggest using them as a way to brainstorm how to write more specifically about your goals and motivation for pursuing a doctorate.

Please let me know if you have any questions, and I wish you the best with your applications!

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