免费修改留学申请文书_第二周幸运儿公布

美国本科申请,美国研究所申请

College Admissions EssayBoot Camp (2)

让大家久等了,第二周两位中奖幸运儿的修改完稿已经列出于下方,这次的编辑跟上周的不一样。想参加的同学,请参考活动办法
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修改完稿内可以看见 1.追踪修订痕迹(轻松比对修改前后文), 2. 右边是母语编辑的整体评价跟细部评价(例如单字选用或冗句删除的原因)。
*修改标准为官网付费标准


第三份文件:由编辑Max修改
Comment:
Your SOP is fairly well organized and you’ve have taken some strong initial steps to explain your experiences and interests. I flagged some potential issues below for your review below and I have made substantial sentence-level edits to refine and clarify your writing.

 

修改完稿:
Wordvice_week2_SoP


第四份文件:由编辑Rachel修改
Comment: 
In this SOP, you clearly show that you are passionate about this subject and are eager to prove that you have the qualifications to enter this program. Per your instructions, I have focused my edits on only the words in black, not in red. I have enhanced the overall English grammar, word choice, and punctuation of your writing. Please review each of my edits so that your English writing can improve even more in the future. Good luck!

学生修改返馈:

首先谢谢Wordvice帮我免费修改了文书。
这个文书是我申请visitor使用的文书,上交资料不需要resume只用交ps,所以内容方面有可能和申请研究生的ps不太相似,不过老师真的改的超细。
一开word满眼的红~改了很多细节:语法、用词。估计是那种native speaker只能意会不能言传的东西。
还建议我更加注重于和专业相关的经历,我觉得很中肯。
在明年申请的时候,resume上出现的东西不要再一次堆到ps上,ps就像写作文,是要围绕中心思想的。
再就是我实习的那段。我觉得其实蛮虚的- -老师居然感觉很strong,很惊讶,看来还是多写例子好。
以上~
再次感谢~

修改完稿:
Wordvice_week2_PS

 

 

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