修改完稿内可以看见 1.追踪修订痕迹(轻松比对修改前后文)， 2. 右边是母语编辑的整体评价跟细部评价(例如单字选用或冗句删除的原因)。
Thank you for letting me assist you with this personal statement and for using wordvice.cn.
I found that your statement was structured into logical paragraphs, and it was specific, detailed, and informative for the admissions committee. Due to wordiness, revisions attempted to clarify your ideas more briefly and reduce word count overall.
Revisions also improved word choice, sentence structure, conventions and verb tense.
I suggest you review all my marginal comments and suggestions for further revision.
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由编辑Josh Van Zak 修改，编辑Comment:
Overall, this is a great resume that could benefit from more specificity. For instance, you should make it clear what you were looking for in your research experiments (ie., your hypotheses), how you analyzed your results, and whether or not you were successful.
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