Your SOP is fairly well organized and you’ve have taken some strong initial steps to explain your experiences and interests. I flagged some potential issues below for your review below and I have made substantial sentence-level edits to refine and clarify your writing.
In this SOP, you clearly show that you are passionate about this subject and are eager to prove that you have the qualifications to enter this program. Per your instructions, I have focused my edits on only the words in black, not in red. I have enhanced the overall English grammar, word choice, and punctuation of your writing. Please review each of my edits so that your English writing can improve even more in the future. Good luck!