In order to improve the competitiveness and cost performance of the low-cost AB5-type alloy battery as so to meet the market demand, the alloy cost should be further reduced.
上方例句中的as so to以to替换的话，不仅可以解决wordiness也可以缩减字数。
替代 As a result 及 As a consequence 的 Therefore, Consequently, Thus
替代 On the other hand 的 Whereas, In contrast
替代 More specifically 和 In particular 的 Specifically
替代 In addition 的 Furthermore, Additionally, Moreover
替代 A number of 的 Several
大部分作者都在Introduction和Discussion开头写上这一类句子的习惯。虽然确立文章脉络相当重要，但應避免過於基本信息。例:在癌症论文当中，避免写入“According to the World Health Organization, cancer is a global health problem”等基礎知識。
使用“It was found that…”, “We found that…” 等这一类开头时，需考虑是否要提醒读者内容是否关于研究结果。
例: It was found that the agent XYG was effective in preventing metastasis.
The agent was effective in preventing metastasis.
例: Protein XY was found to be present in the cytoplasm
Protein XY localized to the cytoplasm.
We conducted an analysis of protein XY.
We analyzed protein XY.
A diagnosis of diabetes was made based on the results.
Diabetes was diagnosed based on the results.
例: The XYZ was measured through mass spectroscopy.
Mass spectroscopy measured the XYZ.